17.8.21

   
   the bait
             a sudden unspeakable sweat
eight syllables


hed start from there

create a pensee around a suggestion by Anne Carson

might have stepped in it  
                         the fourth line of five eight syllables is the setting   a sudden unspeakable sweat


    rolling . . 
                line one  subject  two syllables   armpit

second line  description   adolescent

third line  action  seven syllables   taut nimble fingers tickle

fifth line  final thought  six syllables   desirous  once more please

wellshit
       dug out of that nicely Stoked  deserve strokes and pats for that

 

armpit

adolescent

taut nimble fingers tickle

a sudden unspeakable sweat

desirous  once more please

pensive pensee 

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